Lynx, Destroyer of Worlds (with Science!) (lynxreign) wrote,
Lynx, Destroyer of Worlds (with Science!)
lynxreign

Editing

I read an article on Salon that begins with this sentence

Having stampeded his ill-informed predecessor into a series of catastrophic blunders, it appears that Dick Cheney has declared open bureaucratic war -- the only kind he's ever known how to fight -- upon President Barack Obama.


Do you see anything wrong with it or is it all in my head?

EDIT: Since I'm discussing this with the author, I'd like as many people giving their opinions as possible, even if you echo someone who has already answered, please.
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